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The pie chart and its ancillary proportion bar give information about the data about the visitors to different types of tourist attractions in Britain in 1999.

The pie chart and its ancillary proportion bar give information about the data about the visitors to different types of tourist attractions in Britain in 1999. PLA62
The pie chart and its ancillary proportion bar give information about the data about the visitors to different types of tourist attractions in Britain in 1999. Overall, Theme Park and Museum/Galleries were the most popular attractions in the time shown and it is clear that Blackpool Pleasure accounted for the highest number of visitors in the Theme Park sector. For the pie chart, it is notable that theme parks attracted 38% of tourists, and museums/galleries ranked the second closely, with only a 1% gap. A quarter of the total number of visitors spent time on wildlife parks & zoos (9%) and historic houses & monuments (16%). Looking at the breakdown of the figure for theme parks, we can see that nearly a half of visitors (47%) went to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. The less popular areas of Theme Park included Alton Tower and Pleasureland Southport, which accounted for 17% and 16% of the total visitors, respectively. Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland Windsor attracted evenly 10% of visitors.
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Overall
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Theme
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and Museum/Galleries were the most popular attractions in the time shown and it is
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that Blackpool Pleasure accounted for the highest number of
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in the
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Theme
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Park
sector.

For the pie chart, it is notable that
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theme
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parks
attracted 38% of tourists, and museums/galleries ranked the second
closely
, with
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only
a 1% gap. A quarter of the total number of
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spent time on wildlife
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parks
& zoos (9%) and historic
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houses
& monuments (16%).

Looking at the breakdown of the figure for
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theme
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parks
, we can
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that
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visitors
(47%) went to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. The less popular areas of
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Theme
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Park
included Alton Tower and
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Pleasureland
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Southport
, which accounted for 17% and 16% of the total
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,
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Chessington
World of Adventures and
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Legoland
Windsor attracted
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IELTS academic The pie chart and its ancillary proportion bar give information about the data about the visitors to different types of tourist attractions in Britain in 1999.

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