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The pie cart and table describe the details about jobs

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The pie chart elucidates different kinds of jobs Anthropology graduate received after their university and table illustrates their salary after 5 years of the job. At a cursory glance, half of the graduates got full-time jobs after the course and a majority of these people got salary more than 75000$ after 5 years of their employment. Regarding employment, while around 12% of degree holders did not get any work, there is no data for 8%. When full-time post graduation course were opted by 8%, only 5% of graduates found partime job along with post graduation course. However, a significant amount of the course holder got full- time jobs at 52 % Considering salary pattern, there were 3 types jobs could be seen namely, freelance consultants, government and private sector. The government sector provided a good salary of above $100000 for 50% workers, but only 30% of private employees got the same figure. In the second position Freelance workers with at 40%. The lowest salary, between $25000 and $49999, was given to 5% of both government and freelancer staff and 10% private employees.
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kinds of
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Anthropology graduate received after their university and table illustrates their
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salary
after 5 years of the job.

At a cursory glance, half of the graduates
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full-time
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after the
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and a majority of these
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people
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more than
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after 5 years of their employment.

Regarding employment, while around 12% of degree holders did not
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any work, there is no data for 8%. When full-time post graduation
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were opted
by 8%,
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only
5% of graduates found
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partime
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along with post graduation
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.
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, a significant amount of the
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holder
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full- time
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jobs
at 52 %

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pattern, there were 3 types
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could be
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namely
, freelance consultants,
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government
and private sector. The
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sector provided a
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good
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of above $100000 for 50% workers,
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only
30% of private employees
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the same figure. In the second position Freelance workers with at 40%. The lowest
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, between $25000 and $49999, was
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to 5% of both
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government
and freelancer staff and 10% private employees.
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