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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day.

The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. xgyp9
The given pictures illustrate the arrangement of a park, in 1980, and also show the differences now compared to it in the past. It is noticeable that the area has undergone abundant significant changes to meet the recreational demands of the public but some of its similarities still remain. In 1980, the park was surrounded by a four-sided rectangular wall with two gates, one towards the south and the other facing the west side. Also, the two entrances are the exits of the L-shaped road running through the park. At the southeast and the southwest side of the park are grown two pretty flower beds while trees sit at the northwestern corner. Located near the western entrance was a pond surrounded by benches except for the eastern side. At the present, the previous single-corner road has been broadened and added two new side roads thereby creating an intersection in the middle of the area. While the location of the pond and benches sees no sign of change, under the trees now set up tables and chairs which are used for barbecue party purposes. The construction of the new playground led to the removal of the flower bed in the southeastern area whereas it on the opposite side to the west has also been replaced with bushes.
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was surrounded
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, the two entrances are the exits of the L-shaped road running through the
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. At the southeast and the southwest side of the
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are grown
two pretty flower beds while trees sit at the northwestern corner. Located near the western entrance was a pond surrounded by benches
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two new side roads thereby creating an intersection in the middle of the area. While the location of the pond and benches
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, under the trees
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