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Meat Consumption, USA, 1950-2000, per person per year in kilograms

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Spending money on 2 distinct type of meat in America from 1950 to 2000 is given in the bar graph. Overall, at the beginning years beef contributed the biggest proportion but at the end chicken reached its peak Looking at the graph in more details, initial year consumption of paultry was its lowest condition and about 15 kg per person per year while the beef was twice of this figure. In 1960 spending on these 2 sorts of flesh rose slightly. However, in 1970 paultry reached to nearly 30 kilograms per person per year and its counterpart showed of paultry do. In 1980 expenditure on paultry stood at around 28 kilos per person per year while consuming beef was slowly dropping (about 43 kg). Over the next ten year period demand for paultry increased to its top of 50 kilograms per person per year in 2000. In contrast beef lost its domination.
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contributed the biggest proportion
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chicken reached its peak Looking at the graph in more
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consumption of
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was twice of this figure. In 1960 spending on these 2 sorts of flesh rose
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and its counterpart
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do. In 1980 expenditure on
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stood at around 28 kilos per
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while consuming
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period demand for
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increased to its top of 50 kilograms per
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lost its domination.
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