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The pictures illustrate the changes of a tiny township in Islip after a

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The pictures illustrate the changes of a tiny township in Islip after a number of developments during 2005 and 2010 Overall the town underwent a number of dramatic changes. The most essential of which was developing the expansion of the construction of a plethora of stores and services catering for recreation needs. In 2005, the main road was constructed from west to east. To the north of the main road, there was a rural area behind a line of shops, whereas the south was surrounded by two chains of shops accommodation in the south. Park was to the right of the residential area, while school was to the left of it and at the bottom of the minor road In the next five years, the most significant change in this town was the appearance of the highway and the main road was covered into a pedestrian precinct. In the North of the pedestrian area, the chains of shops were completely demolished. In this area, the bus stop and parking were constructed, between these two areas was a shopping mall. A new residential area was also redeveloped and people can access it through a tiny road connected to the highway.
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of a tiny township in
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Islip
after a

number of developments during 2005 and 2010

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the town underwent a number of dramatic
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changes
. The most

essential of which was developing the expansion of the construction of a plethora of stores and services catering for recreation needs.

In 2005, the main
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road
was constructed
from west to east. To the north of the main
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road
, there was a rural
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area
behind a line of shops, whereas the south
was surrounded
by two chains of shops accommodation in the south. Park was to the right of the residential
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area
, while school was to the
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left
of it and at the bottom of the minor
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road


In the
next
five years, the most significant
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change
in this town was the

appearance of the highway and the main
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road
was covered
into a pedestrian precinct. In the North of the pedestrian
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area
, the chains of shops were completely demolished.
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In
this
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area
, the bus
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stop
and parking
were constructed
, between these two
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areas
was a shopping mall. A new residential
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area
was
also
redeveloped and
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people
can access it through a tiny
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road
connected to the highway.
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IELTS academic The pictures illustrate the changes of a tiny township in Islip after a

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199 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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