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The given bar chart compares the figure of three different types of entrepreneurs in the United Kingdom named small, medium and large businesses who had a social media presence from 2012 to 2016. In general, the large businesses had the highest figure over the period.

The given bar chart compares the figure of three different types of entrepreneurs in the United Kingdom named small, medium and large businesses who had a social media presence from 2012 to 2016. In general, the large businesses had the highest figure over the period. eAL27
The given bar chart compares the figure of three different types of entrepreneurs in the United Kingdom named small, medium and large businesses who had a social media presence from 2012 to 2016. In general, the large businesses had the highest figure over the period. As can be seen, the percentage of large businesses was the highest during 4 years of the stage. In 2012 and 2013, the figure of people who were businesses with a social media presence shared the same number, at 77%  while in 2014, the figure was nearly the same, around 76%. However, in 2015, the figure dropped at 52% before increasing in 2016 with the highest percentage over the chart approximately 80%, at 79%. Turning to the small business and medium business, the figure in 2016 was the highest around 48% and 52% respectively. In 2012, the figure for small businesses was around 28%, and increased to 30% in 2013 and raised to 35% in  2014 before coming back to 30% in 2015. On the contrary, the figure in medium businesses started in 2012 with 31%. In 2013 and 2014, the figure increased to 46% and 48% respectively. However, in 2014, it shared the same number with small businesses, at 30%.
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of three
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types of entrepreneurs in the United Kingdom named
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, medium and large
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who had a social media presence from 2012 to 2016.
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, the large
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had the highest
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over the period.

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, the percentage of large
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was the highest during 4 years of the stage. In 2012 and 2013, the
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who were
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with a social media presence shared the same number, at 77%
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while in 2014, the
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was
nearly
the same, around 76%.
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, in 2015, the
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dropped at 52%
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increasing in 2016 with the highest percentage over the chart approximately 80%, at 79%.

Turning to the
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small
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and medium
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, the
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in 2016 was the highest around 48% and 52%
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. In 2012, the
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was around 28%, and increased to 30% in 2013 and raised to 35% in
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2014
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coming back to 30% in 2015.
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in medium
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in 2012 with 31%. In 2013 and 2014, the
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increased to 46% and 48%
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, at 30%.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart compares the figure of three different types of entrepreneurs in the United Kingdom named small, medium and large businesses who had a social media presence from 2012 to 2016. In general, the large businesses had the highest figure over the period.

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