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The map picture below show that the dahl conference hall was built in 1981 and constructed in 2020

The map picture below show that the dahl conference hall was built in 1981 and constructed in 2020 3bBk5
The Dahl conference hall built in 1981 and modified in 2020 has been shown with the help of map. Overall, from the pictures it is clear that the hall was not fully constructed in 1985, but after 35 years it seems developed. To begin with, in 1985 the area of car parking was covering least place while after planning at the place of car parking there was new block developed for 20 rooms. Yet, rooms, hall, reception as well as gardens remained same. But, in the year 2020, east side gardens replaced with car parking. Furthermore, in the planned map, it seems more constructed part from the north east side more space was covered in South side with IT course, canteen and kitchen afterwards, the three meeting rooms had been constructed along with it one game room was added.
The
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Dahl
conference hall built in 1981 and modified in 2020 has
been shown
with the
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help
of map.

Overall
, from the pictures it is
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clear
that the hall was not
fully
constructed in 1985,
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but
after 35 years it seems developed.

To
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begin
with, in 1985 the area of car parking was covering
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least
place while after planning at the place of car parking there was new block developed for 20
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rooms
.
Yet
,
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rooms
, hall, reception
as well
as gardens remained same.
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But
, in the year 2020, east side gardens replaced with car parking.

Furthermore
, in the planned map, it seems more constructed part from the
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north east
side more space
was covered
in South side with IT course, canteen and kitchen afterwards, the three meeting
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rooms
had
been constructed
along with it one game
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room
was
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added
.
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IELTS academic The map picture below show that the dahl conference hall was built in 1981 and constructed in 2020

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
139 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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