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the percentage of visitors to Brighton who made attractions.

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This line graph above gives us some information about the percentage of visitors to Brighton who made attractions. Overall, it can be seen that after 1990, Pavillion was even the most popular area than other attractions. To begin, between 1980 and 2010, even there was little change, both the percentage of tourists who came for festival and pier proceeded regularly, nevertheless the number tourists who visited the festival steadily about 25% and always had more than who visited the Pier. Even though after 2000 the percentage of tourist to Pier increased to just over 20% however it did not catch up with the Festival. On the other hand, the percentage of visitors who visited the art gallery and Pavillion became few fluctuations. In 1985 the number of tourists who went to the art gallery was at peak point with just under %40. Following this year, it came down dramatically by 20% and this downward trend sustained over the years and it ended with under 10%. Meanwhile, in 1995, the number of visitors who visited Pavillion reached its peak point (nearly %50) but, after this, it decreased and finished with 30%.
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, both the
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came for festival and pier proceeded
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the festival
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the Pier.
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to Pier increased to
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over 20%
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it did not catch up with the Festival.

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the art gallery and
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Pavillion
became few fluctuations. In 1985 the number of
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tourists
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who
went to the art gallery was at peak point with
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under %40. Following this year, it came down
dramatically
by 20% and this downward trend sustained over the years and it ended with under 10%. Meanwhile, in 1995, the number of visitors
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Pavillion
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, after this, it decreased and finished with 30%.
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