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the map below shows the beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today.

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The map below gives information about the advances made on the beachfront area in Australia in 1950 till today. Overall, it is apparent by comparing the map that there are numerous approaches made. In 1950 there was not any restaurant but today there is one located on the left side of the beach near the surf area which was added later besides the pool. It is evident that the pool was only 25 meter in area which has double in size today; however, the pool on the right side is unchanged till the date. It is noticeable that surf area is the added feature on both the sides of the swimming pool which was not present before. Moreover, the road is extended from car parking area to the light house through/ via surf area. Furthermore, Light house, Pavilion, Dining area and beach has been unchanged throughout the years. On contrary the car parking has extended its area in both length and width on the left side. The children playground which was before has been demolished and new car parking is build due to increase in traffic congestion for parking.
The map below gives information about the advances made on the beachfront
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in Australia in 1950 till
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, it is apparent by comparing the map that there are numerous approaches made. In 1950 there was not any restaurant
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today
there is one located on the
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left
side of the beach near the surf
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which was
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added
later
besides
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pool
. It is evident that the
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was
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only
25
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in
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which has
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double in size
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today
;
however
, the
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on the right side
is unchanged
till the date. It is noticeable that surf
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is the
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added
feature on both the
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of the swimming
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pool
which was not present
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before
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Moreover
, the road
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from car
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to the light
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house
through/ via surf
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Furthermore
, Light
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house
, Pavilion, Dining
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area
and beach has
been unchanged
throughout the years. On contrary the car
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parking
has extended its
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area
in both length and width on the
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left
side. The children playground which was
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before
has
been demolished
and new car
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is build due to increase in traffic congestion for
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