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The percentage of international students studying in different Canadian universities.

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The given graph shows increment in the number of international students graduating from the Canadian universities in different provinces over a period of 5 years, from 2001 to 2006. British Columbia has seen a significant amount of surge in the number of international graduates, from 4. 5 % in 2001 to 10. 5% in 2006 which is more than double. However, looking at Quebec, the progression isn't so strong, only 2% of increase has been witnessed over the last five years. Additionally, Nova Scotia and New Brunswick provinces has also seen good amount of increment in the number of international graduates, which is approximately similar for both cases, that is around 4% of increase between 2001 and 2006. While three provinces namely Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador and Ontario have approximately doubled their International graduates in this time span. whereas, with a stark contrast, Alberta has seen a significant fall in the percentage of international graduating students. That is, from approximately 6% in 2001, the number of students has decreased to only 4% by the end of the year 2006. Comparing overall data, on an average the number of international students graduating from these provinces has doubled in 5 years. But, the trend has not been same for all provinces, speaking of which is Alberta.
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over a period of 5 years, from 2001 to 2006.

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graduates, from 4. 5 % in 2001 to 10. 5% in 2006 which is more than double.
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graduates, which is approximately similar for both cases,
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2006.

Comparing
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