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the percentage of energy which was produced by various sources in France in 2 different years, 1995 and 2005.

the percentage of energy which was produced by various sources in France in 2 different years, 1995 and 2005. bx3XX
The given pie charts compare the percentage of energy which was produced by various sources in France in 2 different years, 1995 and 2005. Overall, It is clear that the proportion of energy generated by gas and coal dominated the chart in 2 years. In addition, the figure for gas, coal and nuclear tended to increase from 1995 to 2005, whereas the opposite was true for petrol. Beginning in 1995, the proportion of energy production from coal is approximately 29. 8%. After 10 years, figure for coal experienced a slight increase to 30. 93% and still remained the highest one. As for gas energy source, the initial percentage was around 29. 63 and then increased to 30. 31% in 2005. Also, the percentage of power generated by nuclear increased from 6, 4% to 10, 1% while that of other sources increased from 4. 9% to 9. 1%. Proportion of power produced by petrol began at 29. 27. However, unlike the remaining sources, figure for petrol then had a tendency to decline to 19. 55% in 2005.
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in France in 2
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years, 1995 and 2005.

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generated by gas and coal dominated the chart in 2 years.
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, the figure for gas, coal and nuclear tended to increase from 1995 to 2005, whereas the opposite was true for petrol.

Beginning in 1995, the proportion of
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production from coal is approximately 29. 8%. After 10 years, figure for coal experienced a slight increase to 30. 93% and
still
remained the highest one. As for gas
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, the initial percentage was around 29. 63 and then increased to 30. 31% in 2005.
Also
, the percentage of power generated by nuclear increased from 6, 4% to 10, 1% while that of other
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sources
increased from 4. 9% to 9. 1%.

Proportion of power produced by petrol began at 29. 27.
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, figure for petrol then had a tendency to decline to 19. 55% in 2005.
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IELTS academic the percentage of energy which was produced by various sources in France in 2 different years, 1995 and 2005.

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