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the online sales of smartphones laptops and tablets In the first quarter of 2019

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The given bar graph reveals the information about the online sales of three electronic gadgets namely smartphone, laptop, and In first four months of 2019. Overall it can be evident that the sales were much more In February and March as compared to other two months through ups and downs In given four months. To begin with, the sales of laptops In January and April reported to be 50 million units approximately whereas in February the sales were at 30 million units. 30 million units of tablets went on online sales In January and it is interesting to notice that online sales of tablets got double In next two months nearly 63 million units. However, in April again only 30 million units were sold online. Probing further, In January 2019 the online sales of smartphones had been reported below 20 million units which increased by 20 million units in February and In March online sales of smartphone reached the peak by 70 million units while In april sales were Same as In February.
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through ups and downs In
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In January and it is interesting to notice that
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