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The graph shows how the population of three cities changed between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line chart sets out New Zealand’s population from 1950 to the present day and projections to 2050. Overall, the demographical figures tell us that New Zealand has an ageing population with the number of people aged between 35 and 64 and 65+ showing upward trends, with the former being projected to become the most prevalent group by 2050. It is also clear that the 15-34 group, albeit dominant from 1950 until the present day, is expected to go through a downturn by 2050. In 1950, New Zealand’s population aged between 15 to 34 was 32. 5%, ranking first among the 4 groups surveyed. This was followed by the figure for the 0-14 group (27. 5%), 35-64 (15%) and 65+ (10%). Thereafter the 15-to-34 age group, despite rising steadily to its high of 45% in the first half, saw a mild drop to 42. 5% in 1990, followed by another steeper decline to only 30% in 2010. In the meantime, the population aged between 0-14 also showed a steady downturn and eventually reached 20% in 2010, whereas the two oldest groups 35 to 64 and over 65 experienced increases, with the figures amounting to 20% for the former and 15% for the latter. By 2050, New Zealand’s population aged 35 to 64 and over 65 will have reached 35% and 20% respectively, with the former group being projected to be the dominant part of the population. Demographics for the two youngest groups, on the other hand, are expected to drop, eventually amounting to a little lower than 30% for the 15-to-34 group and a negligible 10% for the 0-to-14 group.
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population
from 1950 to the present day and projections to 2050.
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demographical
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population
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people
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between 35 and 64 and 65+ showing upward trends, with the former
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group
by 2050. It is
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, albeit dominant from 1950 until the present day, is
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expected
to go through a downturn by 2050.

In 1950,
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surveyed. This
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(27. 5%), 35-64 (15%) and 65+ (10%).
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, despite rising
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35 to 64 and over 65 experienced increases, with the figures amounting to 20% for the former and 15% for the latter.

By 2050,
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35 to 64 and over 65 will have reached 35% and 20%
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, with the former
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group
being projected
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. Demographics for the two youngest
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and a negligible 10% for the 0-to-14
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IELTS academic The graph shows how the population of three cities changed between 1950 and 2010.

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