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the online retail shopping trends in Australia in 2010 with that of 2015.

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The pie charts compare the online retail shopping trends in Australia in 2010 with that of 2015. Overall, electronic product, food and furniture comprised the highest percentage of online sales in Australia in both years. According to the illustration, 27% online retail sale in Australia in 2010 was made by electric appliances, which was followed by home furnishing and food & beverage commerce with exactly 22 and 21 percent respectively. Video games purchased by Australian consumers comprised 19% of total online sales in this year. Finally, gift and book sales accounted for 7% and 4% online retail sales consecutively in 2010. After half a decade, electric products' sales increased by 5% and it comprised one-third of the total online sales in 2015. E-commerce of food & beverage items slightly increased while a nominal decrease could be observed in the trade ratio of furniture. Video games became less popular among Australian online consumers as its sale dropped below half while a surge could be noticed on the gift items' sale ratio. Books as an online retail product were sold more in percentage in 2015 than that of 2010.
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shopping trends in Australia in 2010 with that of 2015.
Overall
, electronic product, food and furniture comprised the highest percentage of
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online
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sales
in Australia in both years. According to the illustration, 27%
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online
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retail
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sale
in Australia in 2010
was made
by electric appliances, which
was followed
by home furnishing and food & beverage commerce with exactly 22 and 21 percent
respectively
. Video games
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purchased
by Australian consumers comprised 19% of total
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in this year.
Finally
, gift and book
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accounted for 7% and 4%
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retail
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sales
consecutively
in 2010. After half a decade, electric products'
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increased by 5% and it comprised one-third of the total
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online
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sales
in 2015. E-commerce of food & beverage items
slightly
increased while a nominal decrease could
be observed
in the trade ratio of furniture. Video games became less popular among Australian
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online
consumers as its
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sale
dropped below half while a surge could
be noticed
on the gift items'
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sale
ratio. Books as an
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online
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product
were sold
more in percentage in 2015 than that of 2010.
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IELTS academic the online retail shopping trends in Australia in 2010 with that of 2015.

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