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The line graph shows the average price of tickets in sold at a theatre.

The line graph shows the average price of tickets in sold at a theatre. Oydaj
The given line graph illustrate the statistical information reagrding the median price of coupon sell at a movie hall and bar graph depicts middle ratio of voucher sold. The units are calibrate in numbers and percentage. Overall, the price of tickets were increased in final year as compared to initial year whereas the percentage of tickets decreased in last year. To embark on, in year 2010 the average price of tickets was 9 pounds in the first quarter and it remain stable till quarter second. After this period of time, there was small change observed in the cost of tickets. further, it increased rapidly and approached to 10. 5 pounds in quarter 3rd. futhermore, it remain constant till 2011. On the other hand, in period of 2010 the ratio of tickets sell in first two quarter are equal was approximately 60%. moreover, in third quarter the cost of tickets fell upto 10% less. The price of ticket in last quarter of 2010 was skyrockted till 80% respectively. Similarly, 20% coupon was sold in year 2011. although, in third quarter it reached 50% of tickets sell. The last quarter of final year the measurement of sold tickets nearly 80%.
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line graph illustrate the statistical information
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reagrding
the median
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price
of coupon sell at a movie hall and bar graph depicts middle ratio of voucher sold. The units are
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calibrate
in numbers and percentage.

Overall
, the
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price
of
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tickets
were increased
in final
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year
as compared to initial
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year
whereas the percentage of
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tickets
decreased in last year.

To embark on, in
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year
2010 the average
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price
of
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tickets
was
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9 pounds
in the
first
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quarter
and it
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remain
stable till
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quarter
second. After this period of time, there was
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small
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change
observed in the cost of
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tickets
.
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further
, it increased
rapidly
and approached to 10.
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5 pounds
in
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quarter
3rd.
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futhermore
, it
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remain
constant till 2011.

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, in period of 2010 the ratio of
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tickets
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sell
in
first
two
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quarter
are equal was approximately 60%.
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moreover
, in third
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the cost of
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tickets
fell
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upto
10% less. The
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price
of
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ticket
in last
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of 2010 was
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skyrockted
till 80%
respectively
.
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, 20% coupon
was sold
in
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year
2011.
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although
, in third
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quarter
it reached 50% of
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tickets
sell. The last
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quarter
of final
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the measurement of sold
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tickets
nearly
80%.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the average price of tickets in sold at a theatre.

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