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The numbers below show basic information about uses of leisure time among different age groups.

The numbers below show basic information about uses of leisure time among different age groups. RkBmM
The chart demonstrates the number of numbers about pastimes of various groups of people differentiated by age. Overall, it can be clearly seen that young people waste more time using a computer than reading, whilst old people spend more time reading on the weekends. According to the data in the chart, people of 13-19 years old spend five minutes reading, whereas they waste more on the computer which consists of seventy-five minutes. The minutes, spent reading and computer, are the same in people’s pastime who are 20-65 years old which composed from thirty minutes. People who are 66 and above years old, engaged in reading more than physical activities such as sports and exercises, so it takes from the 60 and 20 minutes respectively. Compared these groups of people by age, we can make a decision that people who are 20-65 years old are much more interested in physical activities than other types of leisure time, as well as older people choose to spend their leisure time go in for intellectual activities.
The chart demonstrates the number of numbers about pastimes of various groups of
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that young
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waste more
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time
using a computer than
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reading
, whilst
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old
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people
spend more
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time
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on the weekends.

According to the data in the chart,
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people
of 13-19 years
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old
spend five minutes
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reading
, whereas they waste more on the computer which consists of seventy-five minutes. The minutes, spent
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reading
and computer, are the same in
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people’s
pastime who are 20-65 years
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old
which
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composed from
thirty minutes.
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who are 66 and above years
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old
, engaged in
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reading
more than physical activities such as sports and exercises,
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so
it takes from the 60 and 20 minutes
respectively
.

Compared these groups of
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people
by age, we can
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a decision that
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people
who are 20-65 years
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old
are much more interested in physical activities than other types of leisure
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time
,
as well
as older
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people
choose to spend their leisure
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time
go in for intellectual activities.

IELTS academic The numbers below show basic information about uses of leisure time among different age groups.

Academic
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3 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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