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The number of tourists visiting Malaysia and Dubai from 1995 to 2003 is presented below

The number of tourists visiting Malaysia and Dubai from 1995 to 2003 is presented below 2G8w

The linear graph depicts the information about visitors travelled to UAE and Malaysia in the year between 1995 to 2003. To commence with, 100 thousand individual visited to Malaysia in 1995 and it was more than double the number of tourists of Dubai. Next year, visitors to Malaysia was increased while declined in Dubai. Afterwards, the visitors of Dubai and Malaysia rapidly increased and in 1998, 200 thousand travellers was noted in Malaysia whereas over 150 thousand people was recorded in Dubai. Moving ahead, the amount of holiday maker of Malaysia rose in 1999 and again increased in Dubai. Moreover, both countries madeup 350 to 500 thousand tourists in next two years. After this, these figures were hiking in Malaysia and marked up nearly 400 thousand visitors and Malaysia tripper travelled to 240 thousand. Overall, it is clear that more vacationers want to visit Malaysia in starting five year period. On the contrary Dubai got more visitors rest of the time period.

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between 1995 to 2003
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To commence with, 100 thousand individual visited to Malaysia in 1995 and it was more than double the number of tourists of Dubai. Next
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