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The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014

The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014 bL1q
The given line graph depicts how much sales on five variety of jams over a period of 5 years from 2009. Overall, it is clear that, all jams except plum shows an increase in sales over the period of time and strawberry is the largest sold item. In the beginning of the period about 3. 2 million strawberry were sold and then I increased steadily to reach the peak value of 7 million in 2014. Raspberry was the second largest item sold around 2. 8 million in 2009. The sales of raspberry teachers 5 million after 2 years and then it increased slowly. Below 2 million cherry was sold at the beginning and it fluctuated over the period and nearly 3 million jam sold in 2014. The sale of plum is almost same as raspberry in the initial year then it declined dramatically throughout the period and there are no plum sales at the end of the period. In 2009, around 0. 5 million grape was sold and it increase around 5 million to reach the value of 5. 5 million in 2014.
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line graph depicts how
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much
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sales
on five variety of jams over a
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period
of 5 years from 2009.
Overall
, it is
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clear
that, all jams except plum
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shows
an increase in
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sales
over the
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period
of time and strawberry is the largest sold item. In the beginning of the
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about 3. 2
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million
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strawberry
were sold
and then I increased
steadily
to reach the peak value of 7
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million
in 2014. Raspberry was the second largest item sold around 2. 8
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million
in 2009. The
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sales
of raspberry teachers 5
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million
after 2 years and then it increased
slowly
. Below 2
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million
cherry
was sold
at the beginning and it fluctuated over the
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period
and
nearly
3
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million
jam sold in 2014. The
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sale
of plum is almost same as raspberry in the initial year then it declined
dramatically
throughout the
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period
and there are no plum
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sales
at the
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end
of the
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. In 2009, around 0. 5
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grape
was sold
and it
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increase
around 5
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million
to reach the value of 5. 5
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million
in 2014.

IELTS academic The chart shows the sales of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014

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