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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

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The diagram below portion a lot of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. According to chart we looked at about males and females had huge different for leisure time rate ways. The first was reason that, chart analysis was mostly largest leisure time people who was unemployed and retired, chart shows unemployed males to occupy leisure time 80 hours weekly. and unemployed females had leisure time 75 hours weekly. AS well as retire people who were leisure time with unemployed people basically same. Besides, employed full-time people who males can enjoy leisure time approximately 50 hours weekly that it was leisure time around 38 hours weekly for employed full-time female. In addition, employed part-time was only females to have leisure time around 40 hours weekly, finally, for about housewives can relax leisure time approximately 50 hours weekly which it is information only for housewives. In conclude, we used chart analysis knowledge data male leisure time was only female leisure time three one. As well as unemployed or retired people who was highest for leisure time.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

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