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The number of sport TV program

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The table presents the number of sports TV program viewer in four countries, measured in million people. Conspicuously, the figure of tennis is highest while the statistics of motor racing is lowest. According the table, the number of tennis in different countries is hover in the rate of 6 to 7 million people. The statistics of motor racing in UK is approximately twice as high as Australia, over four times equally USA and roughly fivefold higher than Canada. Furthermore, golf is popular with USA by 11, 2 million people, following by Australia, Canada and UK. It is common for people to play athletics in USA. By contrast, in Australia, the number of athletics is less popular with 3 millon people.
The table presents the number of sports TV program viewer in four countries, measured in
Use "a million" or use a number before 'million'.
million
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people
.

Conspicuously
, the figure of tennis is
A determiner is probably missing here: "the highest".
highest
while the statistics of motor racing is lowest.

It appears that a preposition is missing after 'According'.
According the
table, the number of tennis in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
countries is hover in the rate of 6 to 7 million
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people
. The statistics of motor racing in UK is approximately twice as high as Australia, over four times
equally
USA and roughly fivefold higher than Canada.

Furthermore
, golf is popular
A determiner is probably missing here: "with the USA".
with USA
by 11, 2 million
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people
, following by Australia, Canada and UK. It is common for
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people
to play athletics
A determiner is probably missing here: "in the USA".
in USA
. By contrast, in Australia, the number of athletics is less popular with 3
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millon
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people
.
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IELTS academic The number of sport TV program

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
120 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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