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The given diagram demonstrates the way olive oil is made.

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The given diagram demonstrates the way olive oil is made. Overall, it can be clearly seen from the diagram that there exist a total of seven fundamental steps in the process of olive oil production, beginning with the gathering of ripe olives and finishing with the delivery of complete products to warehouses for sale. The very first phase starts with the harvest of mature olive fruits that are then rinsed in cold water in order to get rid of dirt. In the next stage, the cleaned olives are transferred through a belt to a kind a machine for the purpose of being grinded to separate olive paste from olive stones. After that, the paste is packaged into containers with air holes. The fifth step to be noted is that bags of olive paste are pressed to divide the substance into two different parts including oil and water. In the very last phase of the whole process, the oil is transported to storehouses, ready to be present at the market.
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given
diagram demonstrates the way olive
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oil
is made
.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
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seen
from the diagram that there exist a total of seven fundamental steps in the process of olive
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oil
production, beginning with the gathering of ripe
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olives
and finishing with the delivery of complete products to warehouses for sale.

The
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very
first
phase
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starts
with the harvest of mature olive fruits that are then rinsed in
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cold
water in order to
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get
rid of dirt. In the
next
stage, the cleaned
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olives
are transferred
through a belt to a kind a machine for the purpose of being
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grinded
to separate olive paste from olive stones. After that, the paste
is packaged
into containers with air holes.

The fifth step to
be noted
is that bags of olive paste
are pressed
to divide the substance into two
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different
parts including
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oil
and water. In the
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very
last phase of the whole process, the
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oil
is transported
to storehouses, ready to be present at the market.
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IELTS academic The given diagram demonstrates the way olive oil is made.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
169 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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