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the number of speed cameras using in Melbourne and the percentage of road accidents and deaths occurring in this city between 2002 and 2005

the number of speed cameras using in Melbourne and the percentage of road accidents and deaths occurring in this city between 2002 and 2005 bQno6

The charts provide information about the number of speed cameras using in Melbourne and the percentage of road accidents and deaths occurring in this city between 2002 and 2005. It can be clearly seen from the bar chart that the using of speed cameras in Melbourne showed an upward trend throughout the period. In 2002, speed cameras was only around 35 units, and then it gradually rose to around 65 units in 2004 before soaring to almost 150 units in the year of 2005. Turning to the line graph, the percentage of road accidents in Melbourne had a fluctuation over the period. It was around 3. 5 per cent in 2002 then dropped and hit around 3. 7 per cent in 2004. After that, it marginally increased and reached its peak 4 per cent in 2005. As for the percentage of deaths, it showed below 1 per cent from 2002 to 2003. It reached 1 per cent in 2004 and significantly rose to almost 2 per cent. However, it reduced to 1. 2 per cent at the end.

The charts provide information about the number of speed cameras using in Melbourne and the percentage of road accidents and deaths occurring in this city between 2002 and 2005.

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 soaring to almost 150 units in the year of 2005.

Turning to the line graph, the percentage of road accidents in Melbourne had a fluctuation over the period. It was You use this word too often, consider replacing it withovereverywhereabout
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 3. 5 per cent in 2002 then dropped and hit You use this word too often, consider replacing it withovereverywhereabout
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 below 1 per cent from 2002 to 2003. It reached 1 per cent in 2004 and significantly
 rose to almost 2 per cent. However
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