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number of male and female participation in the Olympics and number of participation

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The bar chart illustrates the number of both gender, female and male who were taking apart in Olympics, while the line graph shows the number of people who participants in it between 1924 and 2012 all overs the world. It is immediately obvious that although the number of people who entered Olympics increased dramatically, the number of women and men who take apart in the Olympic rose sharply too. At first glance it is evident that not only the number of female accounted for a little over O in 1924 but also it was in marked contrast to the number of male in the same year, in other words the number of men was 3 times more than women in 2012 that was the year in which the firs Olympic began. Beside there was a participating growth by near 5000 during 18_year old period. 2012 experiensed a sharp improvement in the number of men and women in Olympics, while the number of men was still over as high as women which stood at just under 6000 and 5000 respectively. With regard to the number of all the participants it can be seen that the number of athlete reached a high of just over 2000 to about over 6000 from 1924 to 1984 and then increased sharply again from just about 6000 to approximately 10000 in 2012 which was entirely diffrent from the number of people who entered in Olympics at first year from it began.
The bar chart illustrates the
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of both gender, female and male
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who
were taking apart in Olympics, while the line graph
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who
participants in it between 1924 and 2012 all
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the world.

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of
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entered Olympics increased
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and
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take apart in the Olympic rose
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too.

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glance it is evident that not
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of female accounted for a
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O in 1924
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also
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of male in the same
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,
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was 3 times more than
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in 2012 that was the
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in which the firs Olympic began. Beside there was a participating growth by near 5000 during
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period. 2012
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in Olympics, while the
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under 6000 and 5000
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of all the participants it can be
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of athlete reached a high of
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2000 to about
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6000 from 1924 to 1984 and then increased
sharply
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about 6000 to approximately 10000 in 2012 which was
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IELTS academic number of male and female participation in the Olympics and number of participation

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