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THE NUMBER OF EMPLOYEES AND FACTORIES IN ENGLAND AND WALES

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The table shows the change in the total number of employees, females and males all included, and factories in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901. In overall, while the number of factories almost tripled, there was a decrease in employees of both genders. In fifty years, the number of men and women working in a factory had a significant drop from 477100 to almost one eighth of its original size, and the difference on the number of employment between these genders shrank as well from around 90000 to 1000, men over women, except 1981, when the population of female employees temporarily exceeded their male counterparts’. Between 1851 and 1861, the number of factories remained stable(225). It then rose sharply between 1861 and 1871 and peaked in 1881 at 721. However, it failed to maintain its growth and began to fall. By 1901, the number of factories dropped to 600.
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in the total
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of employees, females and males all included, and
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in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.

In
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, while the
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of
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almost tripled, there was a decrease in employees of both genders.

In fifty years, the
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of
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men
and women working in a
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had a significant drop from 477100 to almost one eighth of its original size, and the difference on the
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number
of employment between these genders shrank
as well
from around 90000 to 1000,
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over women, except 1981, when the population of female employees
temporarily
exceeded their male counterparts’.

Between 1851 and 1861, the
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of
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remained stable(225). It then rose
sharply
between 1861 and 1871 and peaked in 1881 at 721.
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, it failed to maintain its growth and began to fall. By 1901, the
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dropped to 600.
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