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The number of customers in four restaurants

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The line graph provides information about four main restaurants and the number of cutomers that went to them between 1990 to 2015. Overall it is clear that there are significant changes happend in those years, like some eateries faced an increase in its popuarity, such as Donut Bro, while others show decline in the numbers, like Pizza Hut. In 1990 Pizza Hut was the top one with the most populer restaurant between those four with around 8000 clients that year, while the second top restuarant Chicken Spot, with less 2000 cliens than Pizza Hut, however those two experinced sharp decrease in the numbers later on. Meanwhile Donut Bro started as the second least famous restaurant in 1990 with around 2000 customers, but it had significint growth to be the most populer one in 2015 with 8000, finally Burger Bar who started with only 1000 cutomers but it challenged it self to increase its popularity so it ended up with around 3500 customers in 2015.
The line graph provides information about four main restaurants and the number of
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cutomers
that went to them
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between 1990 to 2015
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clear
that there are significant
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changes
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happend
in those years, like
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eateries faced an increase in its
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popuarity
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Donut
Bro, while others
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show
decline in the numbers, like Pizza Hut.

In 1990 Pizza Hut was the top one with the most
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populer
restaurant between those four with around 8000 clients that year, while the second top
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restuarant
Chicken Spot, with less 2000
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cliens
than Pizza Hut,
however
those two
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experinced
sharp decrease in the numbers later on.

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Meanwhile
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Donut
Bro
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started
as the second least
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famous
restaurant in 1990 with around 2000 customers,
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but
it had
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significint
growth to be the most
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populer
one in 2015 with 8000,
finally
Burger Bar who
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with
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only
1000
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cutomers
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it challenged
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it self
to increase its popularity
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it ended up with around 3500 customers in 2015.
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IELTS academic The number of customers in four restaurants

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