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The map illustrates the plan for the two sides for the construction of a new shopping mall in the city of Brandfield.

The map illustrates the plan for the two sides for the construction of a new shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. 2aaaM
The map illustrates the plan for the two sides for the construction of a new shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. It can be seen that the two sides which have been proposed are in the north and southeast of the city. The first site, S1, is going to be built in the north of the city, above the railway, near the river and road. It is between the residential area and city center, which creates conditions to easily access not only the residents in the area but also in the city center if the shopping mall is built here. The second site, S2, is proposed in the southeast of the city, close to the railway and road. Different from S1, S2 is near to the industrial estate rather than a housing estate. There is a main road that runs through the city and near both sides. On the other hand, there is a large golf course and park in the west of the city, but it is far from both sides.
The map illustrates the plan for the two
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for the construction of a new shopping mall in the city of
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Brandfield
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are in the north and southeast of the city.

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first
site, S1, is going to
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in the north of the city, above the railway, near the river and road. It is between the residential area and city center, which creates conditions to
easily
access not
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the residents in the area
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in the city center if the shopping mall
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The second site, S2,
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in the southeast of the city, close to the railway and road.
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Different
from S1, S2 is near to the industrial estate
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than a housing estate.

There is a main road that runs through the city and near both
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On the other hand
, there is a large golf course and park in the west of the city,
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