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the number of consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers during 25 years

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The line graph shows the number of consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers during 25 years. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the number of pizza and hamburgers rose considerably while the number of fish and chips decreased significantly in given period. With regards to consumption of hamburgers and pizza consisted of 7 times in 1975. Consumption of hamburgers climbed steeeply from 7 times to 85 times during 10 years afterwards it rose rapidly and it showed 101 times in 2000 this amount was the biggest. More interestingly it was not stopped to consum. One of the biggest amounts was consumption of pizza consisted of 5 times in 1975. It grew rapidly between 1975 and 1985 this year it rose significantly from 30 times to 85 times. For this amount it spent 10 years and it not changed upcoming years. With regards tot Fish and Chips, its number was the biggest (100 times ) in 1975 but it declined moderately from 100 times to 85 times. In 1980 it increased slightly and again dipped enormously from 95 times to 39 times between 1985 and 2000
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