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Some young people find it hard to buy their first house or flat. Do you agree?

Some young people find it hard to buy their first house or flat. Do you agree? kLdEn
Nowaday, the own a house or flat is not easy. Especially concern with young people. They find it hard to buy their first house. I agree totally. The salary earned is contribuited into many way, after caculated all the cost must cover daily. The money remaing is used for saving. But here is the things, it is too low for the own house plan. Arcording to papers, need to saving at least twenty years if without the investing activitice. Besides, the property prices is a hot tomato issue. The speed pice is faster day by day. The comunition increasing bring result property cost. The properly can not expand but the people more and more. Demand is bigger than supply. That is ecomomy rule. One thing I want to mention, young people need to be more investing activities. Based on the fix salary will be tough for own the house. Try to make more passive income, investing is the good way. Of course it go with risk therefore need to research profound brand that want to oriently. To sum up, own the house is not easy but does not impossible
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Nowaday
, the
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own
a
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house
or flat is not easy.
Especially
concern with young
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people
. They find it
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hard
to
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buy
their
first
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house
. I
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agree
totally
. The salary earned is
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contribuited
into
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many way
, after
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caculated
all the cost
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must
cover daily. The money
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remaing
is
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used
for saving.
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But
Did you mean "here are the things"?
here is the things
, it is too low for the
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own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
plan.
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Arcording
to papers, need to saving at least twenty years if without the investing
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activitice
.
Besides
, the property prices is a hot tomato issue. The speed
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pice
is faster day by day. The
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comunition
increasing bring result property cost.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
properly
can not expand
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but
the
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people
more and more. Demand is bigger than supply.
That is
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ecomomy
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rule
. One thing I want to mention, young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
need to be more investing activities. Based on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
salary will be tough for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
. Try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
more passive income, investing is the
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good
way. Of
The comma is probably missing here: "course, it".
course it
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go with
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risk
therefore
need to research profound brand that want to
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oriently
.

To sum up,
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own
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
is not easy
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but
does not impossible

IELTS academic Some young people find it hard to buy their first house or flat. Do you agree?

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
188 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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