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The number of boys and girls using the internet at redwood secondary school from 1950 to 2000.

The number of boys and girls using the internet at redwood secondary school from 1950 to 2000. GrVAe
The given bar graph illustrates the number of boys and girls who used the internet at redwood secondary school from 1995 to 2000. Overall, it can be see that students who used the internet were increased with the given time period. Also, in general the internet was used by boys was more than girls. In detail, the highest number of boys and girls who used the internet was 325 in 2001 and 2002 respectively. In 1998, the internet was used by boys at redwood secondary school accounted for nearly 290 and this figures rose slightly at 310 and 320 in 1999 and 2000 respectively. By contrast, in 1998, in redwood secondary school number of girls who used the net stood at around 300, but it fell moderately in 1999 and reached 290. Moreover, in1996 and 1997, the number of boys used the internet in school was approximately 180 and 240 respectively, while the figures for girls were roughly 180 and 230 respectively. Finally, in1995 there was a least number of boys and girls used the internet with the figures of nearly 110 and 80 respectively.
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IELTS academic The number of boys and girls using the internet at redwood secondary school from 1950 to 2000.

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