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Summarize the bar chart with highlights of a physical activity performed in 2010 by Australian people regularly

Summarize the bar chart with highlights of a physical activity performed in 2010 by Australian people regularly o8MJ9
The bar chart delineates the percentile of Australian males and females in specific age groups who used to perform physical activities on daily basis in 2010. Overall, it is deduced that highest proportion of females aged between 45 and 54 practised certain physical exercises, whereas men aged 15-24 gave highest preference to the same. At first glance, it is interpreted that 52% 15 to 24 year old males were interested in exercise which was 5% more than proportion of female participation of the same age. It was followed by 25-34 year old age group, where men and women participation was 42% and 48% respectively. The percentage of males declined steadily to 39. 5% and for women, it elevated tremendously to 52% in reference to 35-44 year old age group. Moving further, in context to 45-54 year olds, male and female proportion had a difference of 10%. Surprisingly, 45% of 55-64 year old men liked to go for a physical activity which climbed up to 46 % in case of 65 year olds and over. However, just 47% of old aged women were interested to perform regular exercise.
The bar chart delineates the percentile of Australian
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used
to perform physical activities on daily basis in 2010.
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that highest proportion of
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females
aged between 45 and 54
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certain physical exercises, whereas
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men
aged 15-24 gave
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preference to the same. At
first
glance, it
is interpreted
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year
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old
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males
were interested
in exercise which was 5% more than proportion of
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female
participation of the same
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age
. It
was followed
by 25-34
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year
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old
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age
group, where
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men
and women participation was 42% and 48%
respectively
. The percentage of
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males
declined
steadily
to 39. 5% and for women, it elevated
tremendously
to 52% in reference to 35-44
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year
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old
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age
group. Moving
further
, in context to 45-54
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year
olds, male and
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female
proportion had a difference of 10%.
Surprisingly
, 45% of 55-64
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year
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old
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men
liked to go for a physical activity which climbed up to 46 % in case of 65
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olds and over.
However
,
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just
47% of
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old
aged women
were interested
to perform regular exercise.
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IELTS academic Summarize the bar chart with highlights of a physical activity performed in 2010 by Australian people regularly

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