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Avocados diagram process of extracting oil from them.

Avocados diagram process of extracting oil from them. 7WB82
The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing avocado oil from avocados. Overall, this method consists of seven linear steps. Beginning with selecting best avocados and ending up with filling it in the bottles. In the initial steps, the avocados are harvested from the crops and rotten ones are removed by humans who check all the fruits for quality control. Then the fruits are washed in the washer in order to remove germs and other things from them. After that, all the avocados are crushed and blended in industrial size machines. Furthermore, pulp of the avocados is used while, other excess items for instance seeds and skins are reused to plant more trees in orchards. After this step, the pulp and juice of avocados is first centrifugated by machines, consequently, oil and water separated from solid wastes. Moreover, solid waste is used just like skins and seeds in orchards while, waste water is disposed. In next step, extracted oil in previous step is filtered in order to remove any extra items from it. Finally, clarified oil is filled into bottles and ready to use.
The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing avocado
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oil
from avocados.

Overall
, this method consists of seven linear
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steps
. Beginning with
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selecting best
avocados and ending up with filling it in the bottles.

In the initial
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steps
, the avocados
are harvested
from the crops and rotten ones
are removed
by humans who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
all the fruits for quality control. Then the fruits
are washed
in the washer in order to remove germs and other things from them. After that, all the avocados
are crushed
and blended in industrial size machines.
Furthermore
, pulp of the avocados is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
while, other excess items
for instance
seeds and skins
are reused
to plant more trees in orchards.

After this
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step
, the pulp and juice of avocados is
first
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centrifugated
by machines,
consequently
,
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oil
and water separated from solid wastes.
Moreover
, solid waste is
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used
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just
like skins and seeds in orchards while, waste water
is disposed
. In
next
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step
, extracted
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oil
in previous
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step
is filtered
in order to remove any extra items from it.
Finally
, clarified
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oil
is filled
into bottles and ready to
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use
.
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IELTS academic Avocados diagram process of extracting oil from them.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
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