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The maps shows the beachfront in Australia in 1950 and at present

The maps shows the beachfront in Australia in 1950 and at present 8aABm
The given two maps describes an area named beachfront in Australia, before it was first inaugurated in 1950 and the current situation of that place. Overall, it can be depicted from the given layouts that, there have been some significant changes made during the past years. To commence with, in 1950 there was a play ground beside the road in the north-west direction however, at present a car parking has been build in place of play ground whereas the dining tables remains at the same postion as well as the pavillion too remained unchanged. Moreover, the road had been extended upto the lighthouse which is in the southern part of area, parallel to the beach. Furthermore, there were two swimming pools in both the sides of the beach out of which one in the west side has been renovated and it's depth is increased from 25 metres to 50 metres. Last but not the least, a restaurant is made at present in right corner of the beach. In addition, a surfing club is started in between the hotel and the pool.
The
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given
two maps
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describes
an area named beachfront in Australia,
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before
it was
first
inaugurated in 1950 and the
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current
situation of that place.

Overall
, it can
be depicted
from the
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given
layouts that, there have been
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some
significant
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changes
made during the past years.

To commence with, in 1950 there was a play ground beside the road in the north-west direction
however
, at present a car parking has been build in place of play ground whereas the dining tables remains at the same
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postion
as well
as the
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pavillion
too remained unchanged.
Moreover
, the road had
been extended
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upto
the lighthouse which is in the southern part of area, parallel to the beach.

Furthermore
, there were two swimming pools in both the sides of the beach out of which one in the west side has
been renovated
and it's depth
is increased
from 25
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metres
to 50
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metres
. Last
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but
not the least, a restaurant
is made
at present in right corner of the beach.
In addition
, a surfing club is
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started
in between the hotel and the pool.
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IELTS academic The maps shows the beachfront in Australia in 1950 and at present

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