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Task 1 academic about mulity graphs

Task 1 academic about mulity graphs 3A6BN
These charts below provides information in regards to the country of birth of people living in Australia and where people born in these countries live. Overall, it can be seen that the majority of people born in New Zealand in addition that a large persentage of babies were born in cities. According to what is shown, it can be noticed that New Zealand is on top of the stas with 73% then Neatherlands came second with 14% the next is United Kingdom with 7%. Lastly China and others countries are 3%. With regards to where people born in these countries live, it can be seen that all of the countries in the table have in common that majority of people were born in the cites China is the highest with 99% then Netherlands is second with 90%, after that the united kingdom come with 89%. Finally New Zealand is the lowest country with 80%.
These charts below provides information
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in regards to
the
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country
of birth of
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people
living in Australia and where
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people
born in these
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countries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the majority of
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people
born in New Zealand
in addition
that a large
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persentage
of babies
were born
in cities.

According to what
is shown
, it can
be noticed
that New Zealand is on top of the
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stas
with 73% then
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Neatherlands
came second with 14% the
next
is United
Kingdom with 7%.
Lastly
China
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and others
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countries
are 3%.

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With regards to
where
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people
born in these
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countries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
, it can be
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seen
that
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all of the
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countries
in the table have in common that majority of
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people
were born
in the cites China is the highest with 99% then Netherlands is second with 90%, after that the
The proper noun "United Kingdom" needs to be capitalized.
united kingdom
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come
with 89%.
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Finally
New Zealand is the lowest
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country
with 80%.
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IELTS academic Task 1 academic about mulity graphs

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
154 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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