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Causes of injuries occurring in the home

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The bar graph shows the cause of injuries occurring in the home. Injuries in the home can be caused by a number of different things, including burns, falls, poisoning, collisions and animals. The first cause was a cut from an object, with 10 percent. The following cause was a burn from hot liquid (3%) and then a fall from a high place, with 7 percent. the fifth cause was poisoning, with 3 percent. A burn from a hot object was next (2%) followed by animal related injuries, with approximately 7 percent. Collisions with people and objects also caused injuries with 4 and 14 percent respectively. Finally, low falls were cause of 27% of injuries in the home. The bar graph outlines the factors responsible for injuries occurring in homes. Falling was the single biggest cause of all household injuries, with low falls responsible for 27% and high falls making up another 7% of all injuries.
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IELTS academic Causes of injuries occurring in the home

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6.5
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