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The maps show the the development of beachfront area in Australia from 1950 and now.

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The provided maps illustrates the information about the development of a beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and now. Overall, it is apparent that there are several changes from 1950 to the present in Australia beachfront such as car park, restaurant and surf club. These are the main changes in the past and present. To begin with, in 1950, there was a ground Park which comes near the city in West direction which has been converted into carpark in the present. There was no restaurant in 1950 but in the present there is a restaurant in the West direction which comes near the beach. Dining tables and pavilion are the remain same in the present as well. However, in the present there are two surf clubs one in the West direction another one is east direction. A small 25 meters pool remains in the general vicinity of the Lighthouse on the other hand, a 25 meters pool has been enlarged to 50 metres and there is currently a restaurant and another Surf club to the left of the beach in West direction.
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the information about the development of a beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and
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in Australia beachfront such as car park,
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restaurant
and surf club. These are the main
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near the city in West
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present
. There was no
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in 1950
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there is a
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restaurant
in the West
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direction
which
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near the beach. Dining tables and pavilion are
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, in the
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there are two surf clubs one in the West
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another one is east
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. A
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25 meters pool remains in the general vicinity of the Lighthouse
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IELTS academic The maps show the the development of beachfront area in Australia from 1950 and now.

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