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The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015.

The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. D12m
The given two map illustrated difference the outskirts of the town of Foxbury by thirty-five years period. We can see, that at the bottom of roundabout changed extremely more, than at the top of the roundabout. Instead of fields, were built warehouses, while tennis courts was changed to sports centre and car park. Across to the tennis in 1980 was park, which in 2015 relocated to another place. Only houses still remained on their place. However, three items, such as grocer's shop, block of floss and terraced houses, were destroyed, and were built car park and supermarket. On the other hand hotel weren't destroyed. Furthermore roads significantly changed too. In the centre of outshirt in 1980 was crossroad, and now was reconstracted to the warehouses. In conclusion, outshirts gratefully developed and changed, were built new buildings, while others were confused, also reconstructed roads.
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map
illustrated difference the outskirts of the town of
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Foxbury
by thirty-five years period. We can
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see
, that at the bottom of roundabout
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changed
extremely
more, than at the top of the roundabout.
Instead
of fields,
were built
warehouses, while tennis courts was
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changed
to sports
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centre
and car park. Across to the tennis in 1980 was park, which in 2015 relocated to another place.
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Only
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houses
still
remained on their place.
However
, three items, such as grocer's shop, block of floss and terraced
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houses
, were
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destroyed
, and
were built
car park and supermarket.
On the other hand
hotel weren't
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destroyed
.
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Furthermore
roads
significantly
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changed
too. In the
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centre
of
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outshirt
in 1980 was crossroad, and
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now
was
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reconstracted
to the warehouses.
In conclusion
,
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outshirts
gratefully
developed and
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changed
,
were built
new buildings, while others
were confused
,
also
reconstructed roads.

IELTS academic The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015.

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