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The maps show the layout of the same secondary school since the West park Secondary school was constructed in 1950.

The maps show the layout of the same secondary school since the West park Secondary school was constructed in 1950. AAML
The maps show the layout of the same secondary school since the West park Secondary school was constructed in 1950. It is evident that the car parking lot has imcreased significantly since 1980 at the expense of housing and entertaining facilities. From 1950 to 1980, the three rows of house nearby the shool was demolished to make way for building car park and science block. The playround behind the school witnessed the replacement of farmland by sport field. The other physical structure that was added was a main building inside the school yard and still remained as was in 2010. By 2010, It seemed to be more vehicles in the school. Therefore, the car park took over sport field for bigger space. The playround are were unchanged in 2010 but was reduced in size the remaining area was used as sport field. It is clear that the main road remained in place  over the period of time.
The maps
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the layout of the same secondary
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school
since the West park Secondary
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school
was constructed
in 1950.

It is evident that the car parking lot has
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imcreased
significantly
since 1980 at the expense of housing and entertaining facilities.

From 1950 to 1980, the three rows of
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house
nearby the
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shool
was demolished
to
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make
way for building car park and science block. The
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playround
behind the
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school
witnessed the replacement of farmland by sport field. The other physical structure that was
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added
was a main building inside the
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school
yard and
still
remained as was in 2010.

By 2010, It seemed to be more vehicles in the
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school
.
Therefore
, the car park took over sport field for bigger space. The
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playround
are
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were
unchanged in 2010
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but
was
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reduced
in size the remaining area was
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used
as sport field. It is
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clear
that the main road remained in place
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over the period of time.
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IELTS academic The maps show the layout of the same secondary school since the West park Secondary school was constructed in 1950.

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