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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. kV8W
There are two graphs about enrollment of students in Australian universities over ten years. One is about overseas students and other one for local students. It is clearly shown that there is increasing pattern in international side of graph and first increasing then it sustained last 4 years. If we have good look on first graph, graph follows increasing trend and also same style followed by commencing line. In 2001, twenty thousands students are admitted by universities and after 10 years the figure goes to 80000 students. As part from overseases, local students also enrolled in up trend manner. although graph showes us straight line from 2006. Commencing side doesn't follow above trends it has both patterns like up and down during decade. After having deep look, we can conclude that number of overseas students will higher in future. May or may not graph of local students same, up or down.
There are two
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about enrollment of
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students
in Australian universities over ten years. One is about overseas
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students
and other one for local
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. It is
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shown that there is increasing pattern in international side of
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and
first
increasing then it sustained last 4 years.

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look on
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,
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follows increasing trend and
also
same style followed by commencing line. In 2001, twenty thousands
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students
are admitted
by universities and after 10 years the figure goes to 80000 students.

As part from
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overseases
, local
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also
enrolled in up trend manner.
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although
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us straight line from 2006. Commencing side doesn't follow above trends it has both patterns like up and down during decade.

After having deep look, we can conclude that number of overseas
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students
will higher
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in future
. May or may not
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of local
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same, up or down.

IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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