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The maps illustrate how West Park Secondary School developed in the period from 1950 to 2010.

The maps illustrate how West Park Secondary School developed in the period from 1950 to 2010. w9je
The maps illustrate how West Park Secondary School developed in the period from 1950 to 2010. In 1950, there were a set of houses located west of the school building. What is more, the diagram additionally reveals some farmland to the south west and a playground toward the south of the West Park Secondary School. Thirty years later in 1980, a car park and a science block had been constructed in the place of the residential area. Furthermore, the farmland was converted to a sports field. Nevertheless, the playground area had not innovated comparable to 1950. In the last year, 2010, the science block remained unaltered while the car park was stretched out through the sports field, which replaced part of the playground zone. Overall, the area around West Park Secondary School had altered considerably in terms of housing and facilities over the period shown. However, the size of the school’s main building is more natural though and the main road has remained the same since the school was built.
The maps illustrate how West
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Park
Secondary
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School
developed in the period from 1950 to 2010.

In 1950, there were a set of
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houses
located west of the
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school
building.
What is more
, the diagram
additionally
reveals
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some
farmland to the
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south west
and a playground toward the south of the West
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Park
Secondary School.

Thirty years later in 1980, a car
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park
and a science block had
been constructed
in the place of the residential area.
Furthermore
, the farmland
was converted
to a sports field.
Nevertheless
, the playground area had not innovated comparable to 1950.

In the last year, 2010, the science block remained unaltered while the car
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park
was stretched
out through the sports field, which replaced part of the playground zone.

Overall
, the area around West
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Park
Secondary
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School
had altered
considerably
in terms of housing and facilities over the period shown.
However
, the size of the
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school’s
main building is more natural though and the main road has remained the same since the
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school
was built
.
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