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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50- years period. The charts are presenting wagons wheels about tourism of two countries over the 50 years. In the Australian section, the first wheel depicts about percentage of tourists coming from the four different countries in the year 1960. We can observe that 53%, European, 25% Britain, 10% Asia and 12% USA tourists visited. In 2010, Despite 53% European tourists only 10% now visiting, and Asia tourists increased from 10% to 63%. In the other two countries, the USA and Britain tourists are also increased. Now move into the Germany section, USA tourist increased from 25% to 29% from 1960 to 2010. The USA and Asia follow the same upward trend-like 25% to 29% and 10% to 25% respectively. Although the European side shows little downward behavior which is 45% to 40%. We can easily get information that Australia is now the hot spot of tourism for Asia rather than Europeans. Germany has more likely visited by Europeans.
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over a 50- years period. The charts are presenting wagons wheels about tourism of two
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over the 50 years.

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coming from the four
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in the year 1960. We can observe that 53%, European, 25% Britain, 10% Asia and 12% USA
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visited. In 2010, Despite 53% European
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visiting, and Asia
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increased from 10% to 63%. In the other two
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, the USA and Britain
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into the Germany section, USA
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increased from 25% to 29% from 1960 to 2010. The USA and Asia follow the same upward trend-like 25% to 29% and 10% to 25%
respectively
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downward behavior which is 45% to 40%.

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information that Australia is
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the hot spot of tourism for Asia
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than Europeans. Germany has more likely visited by Europeans.
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IELTS academic The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

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