Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The maps show the developments which took place in the city which is provided from 1950 to now

The maps show the developments which took place in the city which is provided from 1950 to now GrkkQ
The maps show the developments which took place in the city which is provided from 1950 to now As can be observed, there was much space throughout the city initially. Apart from a government building and the airport, there was nothing to mention in the south of the city. People didn't choose to live in any circumstance of the city but for the north of the major road Ten times as many people are there now compared to 1950. Looking first at the south of the city, an additional administration building has been built and the business district has stretched towards the south of the river. Having been built a new dam, a new lake appeared in place of the river. This made it accessible for people to build a new bridge. Expanding the residential area made progress for new major roads in the south of the lake. Further development was seen in the south-east of the city, the extensibility of the airport In conclusion, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a largely rural to a mainly urban landscape
The maps
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the developments which took place in the city which
is provided
from 1950 to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now


As can
be observed
, there was much space throughout the city
initially
. Apart from a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
building and the airport, there was nothing to mention in the south of the city.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
didn't choose to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in any circumstance of the city
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
for the north of the major
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
road


Ten times as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are there
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
compared to 1950. Looking
first
at the south of the city, an additional administration building has
been built
and the business district has stretched towards the south of the river. Having
been built
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
dam, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
lake appeared in place of the river. This made it accessible for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to build a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
bridge. Expanding the residential area made progress for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
major roads in the south of the lake.
Further
development was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in the south-east of the city, the extensibility of the
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
airport


In conclusion
, a comparison of the two maps reveals a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
from a
largely
rural to a
mainly
urban landscape
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The maps show the developments which took place in the city which is provided from 1950 to now

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts