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The maps show the developments that occurred at West Park Secondary School during a 60-year period from 1950 to 2010.

The maps show the developments that occurred at West Park Secondary School during a 60-year period from 1950 to 2010. RVrlk
The maps show the developments that occurred at West Park Secondary School during a 60-year period from 1950 to 2010. It is clear from the maps that the biggest change that happened at the school was the construction of a car park. Additionally, houses and farmland had completely disappeared by 2010. In 1950, the school was quite small and it was located to the south of the main road. There were residential houses in the northwest corner, but those houses were demolished in 1980 to make way for a car park and a science block. Farmland was also destroyed and replaced by a sports field, while the playground in the southeast area still existed. From 1980 to 2010, the car park was dramatically extended, and the sports field had to move a little to the east, forcing the playground to become smaller. Meanwhile, the science block and the main building of the school still remained close to the main road.
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Secondary
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during a 60-year period from 1950 to 2010.

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clear
from the maps that the biggest
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change
that happened at the
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school
was the construction of a car
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park
.
Additionally
,
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houses
and farmland had completely disappeared by 2010.

In 1950, the
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school
was quite
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small
and it
was located
to the south of the main road. There were residential
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houses
in the northwest corner,
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but
those
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houses
were demolished
in 1980 to
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make
way for a car
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park
and a science block. Farmland was
also
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destroyed
and replaced by a sports field, while the playground in the southeast area
still
existed.

From 1980 to 2010, the car
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park
was
dramatically
extended, and the sports field had to
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move
a
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little
to the east, forcing the playground to become smaller. Meanwhile, the science block and the main building of the
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school
still
remained close to the main road.
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