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The maps show layout of Queen Mary Hospital in 1950

The maps show layout of Queen Mary Hospital in 1950 Ky5LL
The maps presents about the layout of reconstruction design of Queen Mary Hospital since it established at 1960. Generally, the location of the main building of the hospital was same since 1960 to 2000. However, there were an additional facilities such as Nursing School, Pharmacy, and Cancer Center. Following this, in 1960, the first construction of Queen Mary Hospital was located in the south side of the main road. There were four mains area namely main building of hospital in the top right corner and behind the building there was a car park. In the top left corner of area was a shopping centre and behind on it was a farmland. The altered of reconstruction in 1980 was significantly, on the right side of area was same with the first time constructions. But, there were a transformed at left area with redeveloped of Pharmacy next to the main building. Cancer centre in the left top corner where the shopping centre stood and Nursing school behind of Cancer centre. In 2000, Cancer centre was expanded to the Nursing school. Consequently, the area of Nursing School and Car park were reduced by a half.
The maps
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about the layout of reconstruction design of Queen Mary
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Hospital
since it established at 1960.

Generally
, the location of the
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main
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building
of the
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hospital
was same since 1960 to 2000.
However
, there were an additional
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facilities
such as Nursing
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School
, Pharmacy, and
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Cancer
Center.

Following this, in 1960, the
first
construction of Queen Mary
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Hospital
was located
in the south side of the
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main
road. There were four
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mains
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area
namely
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main
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building
of
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hospital
in the top right corner and behind the
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building
there was a car park. In the top
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left
corner of
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area
was a shopping
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centre
and behind on it was a farmland.

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The altered of
reconstruction in 1980 was
significantly
, on the right side of
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area
was same with the
first
time constructions.
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But
, there were a transformed at
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left
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area
with redeveloped of Pharmacy
next
to the
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main
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building
.
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Cancer
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centre
in the
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left
top corner where the shopping
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centre
stood and Nursing
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school
behind of
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Cancer
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centre
.

In 2000,
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Cancer
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centre
was expanded
to the Nursing
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school
.
Consequently
, the
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area
of Nursing
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School
and Car park were
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reduced
by a half.
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