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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day. EQob
The maps show the development of a university campus from 2010 to the present day. It can be seen that the campus was improved a lot and there was a many changed over the years. There are much more facilities that in 2010. Firstly, was demolished restaurant and rebuild student accommodation to student facilities where are shops or student offices. Then instead of shop was build another student accommodation and it means that the number of students housing increased to three. Old university offices were replaced by science building. Teaching block has been substituted to Arts building. In the middle of this campus have been removed also lawns and seating area. However, lake is still there as a central point of the campus. In conclusion as we can se university campus has been changed a lot as I wrote before. There are much more students’ accommodations, students’ facilities and subject buildings have been modernized.
The maps
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the development of a university
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campus
from 2010 to the present day. It can be
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seen
that the
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campus
was
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improved
a lot and there was a
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many
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changed
over the years. There are much more facilities that in 2010.

Firstly
,
was demolished
restaurant and rebuild
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student
accommodation to
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student
facilities where are shops or
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student
offices. Then
instead
of shop was build another
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student
accommodation and it means that the number of
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students
housing increased to three.
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Old
university offices
were replaced
by science building. Teaching block has
been substituted
to
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Arts
building. In the middle of this
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campus
have
been removed
also
lawns and seating area.
However
, lake is
still
there as a central point of the campus.

In conclusion
as we can
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se
university
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campus
has been
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changed
a lot as I wrote
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before
. There are much more
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students’
accommodations,
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students’
facilities and subject buildings have
been modernized
.

IELTS academic The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

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154 words
6.0
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