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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950 0d9G
There are three figures showing some structural changes that Secondary School since it was built in the fifties. In 1950 the education center had just the main building and a playground for kids. The side spaces were allocated to farmland and houses, and it was the year with the shortest school's territory. Thirty years later it got expanded, not just in space, but also in facilities for students. A new science block was built next to a car park, taking place on the previous houses complex. Also, a sports field was set up. Finally, in the third year presented, the field of West Park School kept the same but distribution changed. Car parks took more relevance so sports field got reduced, as well as the playground. It is important to noticed that the main building did not changed along the years.
There are three figures showing
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that Secondary School since it
was built
in the fifties.

In 1950 the education center had
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the main building and a playground for kids. The side spaces
were allocated
to farmland and
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houses
, and it was the
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year
with the shortest school's territory.

Thirty years later it
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got
expanded, not
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in space,
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also
in facilities for students. A new science block
was built
next
to a car park, taking place on the previous
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houses
complex.
Also
, a sports field
was set
up.

Finally
, in the third
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year
presented, the field of West Park School
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kept
the same
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but
distribution
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changed
. Car parks took more relevance
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so
sports field
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got
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reduced
,
as well
as the playground. It is
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to noticed that the main building did not
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changed
along the years.

IELTS academic The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

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