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The maps show a science park in 2008 and the same park today

The maps show a science park in 2008 and the same park today 1ox9L
The provided maps detail alternations to a science park dating back to 2008. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the park is now expanded to include more areas for research, education and improve accessibility. Considering initially the northern end of the park, in 2018, there was considerable untouched natural land that has now been replaced with research and development center. Though the offices of the park remained unchanged, next to this was reception which is removed at present in favour of a university hub. Inspite of not changing the area of business unit, car park as well as cyber security, the size of city park is smaller than before due to adding new facilities, and, most significantly, the cyber security building has been enlarged, overtaking perviously undeveloped land. In the southern section of the park, the circular IT center has transformed into an innovation center. Both railway station (to the southern part of the map) and bus stop (to the east side of the park) are newly added facilities. In addition to this, biking routes is built beside road. All the buildings are connected with walkways.
The provided maps detail alternations to a science
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park
dating back to 2008.

Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that the
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park
is
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now
expanded to include more areas for research, education and
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improve
accessibility.

Considering
initially
the northern
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end
of the
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park
, in 2018, there was considerable untouched natural land that has
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now
been replaced
with research and development center. Though the offices of the
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park
remained unchanged,
next
to this was reception which
is removed
at present in
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favour
of a university hub.
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Inspite
of not changing the area of business unit, car
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park
as well
as cyber security, the size of city
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park
is smaller than
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before
due to adding new facilities, and, most
significantly
, the cyber security building has
been enlarged
, overtaking
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perviously
undeveloped land.

In the southern section of the
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park
, the circular IT center has transformed into an innovation center. Both railway station (to the southern part of the map) and bus
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stop
(to the east side of the
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park)
are
newly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
facilities.
In addition
to this, biking routes
is built
beside road. All the buildings
are connected
with walkways.
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IELTS academic The maps show a science park in 2008 and the same park today

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