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The diagram Illustrates the process involve in cement production, and how it’s then used to manufacture concrete.

The diagram Illustrates the process involve in cement production, and how it’s then used to manufacture concrete. Ny6q2
The diagram Illustrates the process involve in cement production, and how it’s then used to manufacture concrete. Overall, there are two essential materials in order to make cement. Then, it must undergo 4 steps before being bagged. The cement is then mixed in the mixer with 3 other materials with the right proportion in order to construct concrete. In detail, the first stage of cement production is crushing clay and limestone into a coarse, which is then combined in a mixer. This powder is then going through the rotating heater before being ground into cement. The cement is then being bagged and, ready to use. To construct concrete, the cement is added into a large tubule along with the other compositions. Almost half of the tube is filled up with gravel or small stones. Followed by water and cement which fills for a quarter while the remaining 20% gap is filled up by the sands. Finally, after being putted, the machine will spin clock wisely to combine these materials.
The diagram Illustrates the process involve in
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cement
production, and how it’s then
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used
to manufacture concrete.

Overall
, there are two essential materials in order to
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make
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cement
. Then, it
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must
undergo 4 steps
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before
being bagged
. The
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cement
is then mixed in the mixer with 3 other materials with the right proportion in order to construct concrete.

In detail, the
first
stage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
production is crushing clay and limestone into a coarse, which is then combined in a mixer. This powder is then going through the rotating heater
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before
being ground
into
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cement
is then
being bagged
and, ready to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.

To construct concrete, the
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cement
is
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added
into a large tubule along with the other compositions. Almost half of the tube
is filled
up with gravel or
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small
stones. Followed by water and
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cement
which fills for a quarter while the remaining 20% gap
is filled
up by the sands.
Finally
, after
being putted
, the machine will spin clock
wisely
to combine these materials.
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