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The bar chart shows the hours spant on activities

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The chart compares and contrasts data on the changes in the amount of time spent on seven different activities by teenagers in Chester per week between 2002 and 2007. Units are measured in hours. Overall, the highest amount of time was spent on watching television in the period given while bowling remained the least preferred activity. Both categories (shopping and doing homework) were mainly stable in the specified time frame with a slight increase and decrease each year respectively. Furthermore, the most significant difference in expenditure on each activity can be seen in 2002 and 2007 in subtotal. In terms of watching television, teenagers of Chester spent approximately 190 hours per week in a 6-year period on this as opposed to bowling at roughly 13 hours. Moreover, the expenditure on shopping started with just over 5 hours per week in 2002 and increased constantly to 15 hours in the two final years whereas the amount of time spent on doing homework experienced the reversed trend and went down from more than 10 hours per week to the 7 hours approximately between 2002 and 2007. On the other hand, the largest amount of time per week was spent on going to pubs, watching television and shopping (nearly 20 hours, around 37 hours and 15 hours respectively) in 2007 as opposed to the lowest expenditure on the same activities in the most inactive year (40 hours in subtotal in 2002).
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