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The maps depicts a city hospital and road facilities before and after renovation from 2007 and 2010.

The maps depicts a city hospital and road facilities before and after renovation from 2007 and 2010. XEGgq
The maps depicts a city hospital and road facilities before and after renovation from 2007 and 2010. Overall, the revised road maps had numerous added facilities in 2010 than the past road plan in 2007. In 2007, east side of the city hospital was a barren land, while, a new public parking ground was introduced later in year 2010. Secondly, the roundabouts were the new feature in addition to the hospital road, one at the city road junction and next at the north end of the hospital road. The bus station to the west and east side of the hospital road in 2007 was united to form a bus station connecting the roundabouts at the west side of hospital road later in 2010 was the third noticeable change. The car parking to the east side of hospital road also had minor changes which was by removing the bus station from the premises and expanded the capacity of staff parking space in 2010. The major changes were to the south and east meanwhile the north side ring road and west side remained same from that of 2007.
The maps
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depicts
a city
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hospital
and
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road
facilities
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before
and after renovation
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from 2007 and 2010
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, the revised
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road
maps had numerous
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added
facilities in 2010 than the past
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road
plan in 2007.

In 2007, east side of the city
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hospital
was a barren land, while, a new public parking ground
was introduced
later in year 2010.
Secondly
, the roundabouts were the new feature
in addition
to the
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hospital
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road
, one at the city
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road
junction and
next
at the north
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end
of the
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hospital
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road
. The bus station to the west and east side of the
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hospital
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road
in 2007
was united
to form a bus station connecting the roundabouts at the west side of
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hospital
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road
later in 2010 was the third noticeable
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change
. The car parking to the east side of
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hospital
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road
also
had minor
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changes
which was by removing the bus station from the premises and expanded the capacity of staff parking space in 2010.
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major
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changes
were to the south and east meanwhile the north side ring
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road
and west side remained same from that of 2007.
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IELTS academic The maps depicts a city hospital and road facilities before and after renovation from 2007 and 2010.

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