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The maps below show the organization of a book store in 2000 and now.

The maps below show the organization of a book store in 2000 and now. J0opB
The diagrams illustrate the transformation of a book establishment in the year 2000 and at present. As can be seen from the picture, the place has witnessed considerable changes, especially on the left-hand side from the entrance. To the left side starting from the entryway, there was a large fiction section in 2000 but currently it has been converted to a 4-category-contained section which are art, hobbies, cookery and fiction, respectively. In addition, the fiction area nearby also changed into a place for non-fiction books. Moving onto the middle of the shop, many tables followed by benches have been set up for customers to read books before buying. Instead of three former ailes of shelves relating to art, hobbies, and cookery that have been moved to the upper section. One more different thing is that the old non-fiction section in the far right of the entrance in 2000 has been transformed to a brand new cafe. Meanwhile, the travel books zone accompanied by the new books and a service desk in front of the entrance, remained intact.
The diagrams illustrate the transformation of a
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book
establishment in the year 2000 and at present. As can be
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seen
from the picture, the place has witnessed considerable
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changes
,
especially
on the
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left
-hand side from the entrance.

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side starting from the entryway, there was a large fiction
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section
in 2000
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but
currently
it has
been converted
to a 4-category-contained
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section
which are art, hobbies, cookery and fiction,
respectively
.
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, the fiction area nearby
also
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changed
into a place for non-fiction
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books
. Moving onto the middle of the shop,
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many
tables followed by benches have
been set
up for customers to read
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books
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before
buying.
Instead
of three former
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of shelves relating to art, hobbies, and cookery that have been
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moved
to the upper
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section
. One more
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thing is that the
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non-fiction
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in the far right of the entrance in 2000 has
been transformed
to a
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brand new
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. Meanwhile, the travel
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books
zone accompanied by the new
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books
and a service desk in front of the entrance, remained intact.
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